Two main things to do, I think, before I dive into just writing and seeing what comes.
1. Narrowing down on I&D’s abilities.
2. What’s the short story going to be about?
***1. Narrowing down on I&D’s abilities.
Icarus I have a decent feel for and he’s totally Ninja/James Bond criminal on a budget.
Daedalus, strategically should really be a cyberpath, monitoring the net, phones, electronic surveillance, etc. But I don’t want him to be convenient. I want him to be a Zen, bookwormy strong guy. That’s a gut desire, not necessarily thought out. Being a cyberpath makes them the perfect team. The agent and the control. But that’s no fun. I want them both in some kind of action, so I’m going that route. Inconvenience also makes for excellent opportunities for plot complications. Making life difficult for the main characters is key. Enough excuses, that’s what I’m doing and I’ll figure out how to do the rest later.
2. What’s the short story going to be about?
I recently re-watched the Firefly episode, The Train Job. So, how about a small heist story. I think I’ll heist a tractor trailer truck carrying a MacGuffin for Mondrian Industries.
Sneaky heist w/drivers unaware vs. stick-up?
MacGuffin will turn out to be way more important than I&D thought. Not sure how though.
May have multiple people after MacGuffin turning into hot potato like heist ala Snatch, but not too much as it will make the story too long.
Probably will have them keep MacGuffin and sell other stuff not realizing what they possess for later story.
1st version plot outline:
ICARUS ON THE PHONE W/DAEDALUS. DAEDALUS HAS RESERVATIONS ABOUT THIS JOB, THEY JUST FOUND OUT ABOUT THE MACGUFFIN LAST NIGHT. ICARUS REASSURES AND REMINDS DAEDALUS ONCE IT GETS TO MONDRIAN HQ THEY’VE MISSED THEY’RE OPPORTUNITY TO GET THE MACGUFFIN. “TOO LATE NOW.” ICARUS LEAPS OFF OF A BUILDING AND LANDS ON TRUCK.
COMPETING THIEF SEES ICARUS LAND ON TRUCK AND IS TICKED OFF THAT SOMEONE ELSE PICKED THE SAME TIME TO STRIKE.
ICARUS SETS OFF ECM DEVICE TO BLOCK ALL COMMUNICATIONS WITHIN 100’ AND STARTS CUTTING A HOLE IN THE TOP OF THE TRUCK. SLIPS INTO TRUCK. LOOKS AROUND WITH FLASHLIGHT AND FIND STHE RIGHT BOX, SLIPS IT IN A DUFFLE BAG SLUNG OVER HIS SHOULDER, CLIMBS ON THE ROOF.
COMPETING THIEF MOVES TO TAIL THE TRUCK AS IT PASSES. HE WITNESSES ICARUS LEAP ONTO OVERPASS WITH A NEW BULKINESS. HE CUSSES AND IS ABLE TO GET OFF AT THE RIGHT EXIT.
DAEDALUS POV, WORRYING ABOUT HIS PARTNER, WHEN HE SPOTS HIM IN THE REAR VIEW. ICARUS SLIPS IN SHOTGUN SEAT AND THEY PULL OFF. HAPPY HAPPY JOY JOY.
DAEDALUS SPOTS TAILING CAR (COMPETING THIEF) & TRIES TO LOSE IT.
INTERNAL MONOLOGUE OF COMPETING THIEF AND SERIES OF BIZARRE CONSPIRACY THEORIES HE HATCHES AS TO WHO ICARUS AND DAEDALUS ARE AS HE TAILS THEM.
WHILE ICARUS COMPLAINS THAT HE’S A BETTER DRIVER AND THEY SHOULD SWITCH PLACES. DAEDALUS ADMITS HE’S NO NASCAR MAN, NOTES THAT IT ISN’T REALLY POSSIBLE TO SWITCH DRIVER/PASSENGER IN A HIGH SPEED CHASE. THEY ARGUE AND DAEDALUS DOESN’T QUITE CLEAR ANOTHER CAR, TOTALING BOTH CARS IN THE PROCESS. AT LEAST IT’S A STOLEN CAR (SILVER LINING).
COMPETING THIEF SEES THE ACCIDENT AND ICARUS/DAEDALUS HEADING AWAY ON FOOT DOWN A SIDE STREET. CONFIDENCE IS HIS. HE FOLLOWS DOWN A NARROW STREET AND DAEDALUS PUSHES A GARBAGE DUMPSTER IN FRONT OF COMPETING THIEF’S CAR. CRASH!
ICARUS & DAEDALUS NOD AT EACH OTHER AND SMILE AND ICARUS TELLS DAEDALUS, 3 BLOCKS TO A PARTICULAR OPTIMUS CITY METRO (TRAIN/SUBWAY) STATION.
METRO STATION IN SIGHT, COMPETING THIEF COMES FLYING OUT OF NOWHERE AND LANDS IN FRONT OF THEM.
CHOREOGRAPH YUEN WOO-PING STYLE BATTLE WITH COMPETING THIEF SPOUTING OFF VERY ODD ACCUSATIONS AND OUT LOUD THOUGHTS WHILE ICARUS AND DAEDALUS ARE QUITE CONFUSED.
THEY DEFEAT COMPETING THIEF AND GET ON A TRAIN.
THEY GET HOME TO A WAREHOUSE THEY’RE RENTING AND LIVING OUT OF WHAT WOULD HAVE BEEN THE OFFICES IN AN INDUSTRIAL DISTRICT OF OPTIMUS.
THEY DISCOVER THE CARDBOARD BOX CONTAINS A BLACK CARBON FIBER BOX THAT THEY CAN’T GET OPEN OR DAMAGE.
Needs more work and a clear ending that does not feel too episodic.
Until next time.
Friday, January 20, 2012
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2 comments:
as it is cyberpunk, I don't think you have to worry about the info guy being out of the action as he could have a very portable set, or an implant. The multi tasking could ad some fun elements, such as in driving while searching maps and what not.
I REALLY need to get that organized about writing. I just can't seem to do it! Keep up the good work!
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